donb is right about easier reading. I know this is your first story here and hope you don’t give up. xxx video Yes you should keep on writing. lol is it true or a fantasy cause im 22 and i kinda feel bad for u if its trueAnonymous readerReport 2010-03-24 08:34:57Nice story. 4 comments«1»edmondlReport 2016-04-21 03:24:45True or fantasy keep writingAnonymous readerReport 2010-05-09 15:59:01wtf is this why does all this sound weird… Short paragraphs with a double space between them really makes a story much easier to read. donb is right about easier reading. You did fairly well though, at least you didn’t put the entire thing into one WALL of print.
