Don’t be afraid of expounding more.zanonymous readerReport 2013-02-27 23:47:41So overall it has some good potential. xxvideo Don’t be afraid of expounding more.zanonymous readerReport 2013-02-27 23:47:41So overall it has some good potential. You need to work on your detail and the story length. 5 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-03-10 20:05:14Are you all kidding me? The second thing that could be improved is detail. For something like this, a little back-story could be a great help.anonymous readerReport 2013-02-27 23:33:55Not bad but add some more detail«1» If you don’t like it them move onanonymous readerReport 2013-02-28 22:16:38I gave you a negative for this one. Don’t be afraid of expounding more.zanonymous readerReport 2013-02-27 23:47:41So overall it has some good potential. Instead of critisizing just read and move to the next story don’t bring a person down for having the guts to post here.
