more description and lengthAnonymous readerReport 2008-08-28 06:42:182 fast, i agree with comment below this, slow the pace down, and then itll b a good story, but anywho nice 1st tryAnonymous readerReport 2008-08-27 09:17:40terrible pacing, slow down be more descriptive«1» more description and lengthAnonymous readerReport 2008-08-28 06:42:182 fast, i agree with comment below this, slow the pace down, and then itll b a good story, but anywho nice 1st tryAnonymous readerReport 2008-08-27 09:17:40terrible pacing, slow down be more descriptive«1» more description and lengthAnonymous readerReport 2008-08-28 06:42:182 fast, i agree with comment below this, slow the pace down, and then itll b a good story, but anywho nice 1st tryAnonymous readerReport 2008-08-27 09:17:40terrible pacing, slow down be more descriptive«1»
