There were a few things wrong with the grammar/ writing… now write a sequel :)anonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 01:01:17teri maa ki saale. xvideos I am looking forward to seeing more from you so I hope you write more. I’m afraid that is why your approval score is lower than I expected. You’ve got the story-telling part down (done right) but your mistakes in the sentences kinda threw things off for me. now write a sequel :)anonymous readerReport 2013-11-30 01:01:17teri maa ki saale. but I really enjoyed your story, and your ideas. You’ve got the story-telling part down (done right) but your mistakes in the sentences kinda threw things off for me. There were a few things wrong with the grammar/ writing… but I really enjoyed your story, and your ideas.
