It’s not a great tale of sex and adventure. Grammar could use a little work though. xx video You’re doing good. 6.5/10READERReport 2007-02-17 01:36:06There is such a thing as a spell checker…USE IT!!! Even though it didn’t have any sex it in it, it was still extremely good! And to the commenter named Zatch2, it’s not “Definatley, it’s “Definitely.” Learn how to spell before sounding like a writers critic.READERReport 2007-02-17 04:33:43Definatley needs a conclusion. You need to kill him off and let her find her mother.«12» 8 comments«12»READERReport 2007-06-12 13:02:38Go Marines! Grammar could use a little work though. Keep it up and please continueREADERReport 2007-02-17 06:05:20Let’s face it, and I’m not being mean to the author: This is a very average story. You need to kill him off and let her find her mother.«12»
