I would suggest that in the future you either get someone to proof read for you. I would suggest that in the future you either get someone to proof read for you. xx video Idea of the story is great hopefully you have more ideas similar to this and you proofread and fix your future works before posting them. Most were wrong words being used and some were sentences with words out of order and of course the most noticeable is the giant block of text which in itself is a pain to try and read even without having to try and decipher and figure out every lines screw ups.
