Don’t give up.«1» Interesting premise, but you need to proof read and edit spelling and grammar as it is barely legible. x video is that some sort of flatulence?anonymous readerReport 2012-03-31 10:00:02Too short for the style of story. Interesting premise, but you need to proof read and edit spelling and grammar as it is barely legible. Don’t give up.«1» Interesting premise, but you need to proof read and edit spelling and grammar as it is barely legible. Re-write it, keeping the narrative arc in mind, and then proof read it (out loud) to edit out the errors. You’re trying to develop the characters, build suspense and garner enough interest for a sequel but you fail.
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