3 comments«1»tanya WriterReport 2013-06-24 05:48:53A good idea for the story, but you have run on sentences. x video Well written though«1» I give it an 7/10 because it was very undescripted sex scene. 3 comments«1»tanya WriterReport 2013-06-24 05:48:53A good idea for the story, but you have run on sentences. You need to capitalize new sentences. Ad good editor could help you.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-11 21:47:33Im an old er guy an need it badanonymous readerReport 2013-05-09 16:19:58Great story! 3 comments«1»tanya WriterReport 2013-06-24 05:48:53A good idea for the story, but you have run on sentences. 3 comments«1»tanya WriterReport 2013-06-24 05:48:53A good idea for the story, but you have run on sentences. You need to capitalize new sentences. 3 comments«1»tanya WriterReport 2013-06-24 05:48:53A good idea for the story, but you have run on sentences.
