Use more prose when you describe the settings. xx video Use more prose when you describe the settings. It helps.Anonymous readerReport 2008-09-23 16:15:32good start. 2. 11 comments«123»Anonymous readerReport 2009-01-15 17:44:15Is his name jack or jeffREADERReport 2008-12-30 21:02:39Yes,you’ve gotten some pointers.NOW,write some more.eiggahReport 2008-11-30 15:13:31sweet story mmmwordytomReport 2008-10-25 21:03:17Two things:
1. Use more prose when you describe the settings. 2. It helps.Anonymous readerReport 2008-09-23 16:15:32good start. 11 comments«123»Anonymous readerReport 2009-01-15 17:44:15Is his name jack or jeffREADERReport 2008-12-30 21:02:39Yes,you’ve gotten some pointers.NOW,write some more.eiggahReport 2008-11-30 15:13:31sweet story mmmwordytomReport 2008-10-25 21:03:17Two things:
1. 2. 2. Use more prose when you describe the settings. you have room to grow in the next couple of chapters, and i look forward to reading them.«123» you have room to grow in the next couple of chapters, and i look forward to reading them.«123»
