Aside from the atrocious spelling and grammar it lacked a flow. x video I was hooked.anonymous readerReport 2010-11-19 10:21:25This story is obviously the 1st one he/she has written. Read the comments. some problems with the sentence structure but didn’t bother me too much. use spell check and try to build the story a bit more. don’t be in such a hurry to get to the sex. I was hooked.anonymous readerReport 2010-11-19 10:21:25This story is obviously the 1st one he/she has written. would read more stories from you. He asked me to sit on his lap I did, It was great . Aside from the atrocious spelling and grammar it lacked a flow. He asked me to sit on his lap I did, It was great .
