Let’s Start with the intro, so Ken is two years younger than Mendy who is 20, therefore Ken is 18 but still lives at home and Mendy helps him at times? It’s also odd how you forget apostrophes for words like her’s. x video Keep writing.Ghostrider939Report 2012-09-30 21:21:41Main problem, Hank, is HUGE sentences. Keep going at it, just try and edit the background of the story as well as the way you word your words. Will read on…anonymous readerReport 2013-09-05 22:23:505UO9eC Im obliged for the article post.Really thank you! Let’s Start with the intro, so Ken is two years younger than Mendy who is 20, therefore Ken is 18 but still lives at home and Mendy helps him at times? Keep writing.Ghostrider939Report 2012-09-30 21:21:41Main problem, Hank, is HUGE sentences. J.A.G«1»
