It is very jerky and has no flow. x video For those that said it was good, need to take another look. It is very jerky and has no flow. 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2014-08-06 00:49:26That Was A Good Story And I Hope You Write Another One!Anonymous readerReport 2014-03-02 07:18:30I agree with fix’em story was alright but needs fixed and you could write a sequel but that’s just a few suggestions, keep writing.Anonymous readerReport 2013-12-26 21:02:532 / 10 I am disappointed.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-23 01:15:37The tagging is deceptive. 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2014-08-06 00:49:26That Was A Good Story And I Hope You Write Another One!Anonymous readerReport 2014-03-02 07:18:30I agree with fix’em story was alright but needs fixed and you could write a sequel but that’s just a few suggestions, keep writing.Anonymous readerReport 2013-12-26 21:02:532 / 10 I am disappointed.anonymous readerReport 2011-04-23 01:15:37The tagging is
