yes it needs paragraphs and proper grammar, but i enjoyed the natural everyday speaking nature of it. Well done mate. x video cheersAnonymous readerReport 2009-11-26 18:01:23Ur all assholes. Look forward to reading more. Made it more believable. Good job 4 ur first try, try to discribe it a bit moreanonReport 2009-11-21 00:01:24good storyboothillReport 2009-11-17 03:56:22Sorry about the way i’ve written my story,I didn’t realise I was gonna be judged on my grammer,it’s my first go but I’l take your tips on boardAnonymous readerReport 2009-11-16 13:25:02This isn’t even fit to be toilet paper.«12» Look forward to reading more. yes it needs paragraphs and proper grammar, but i enjoyed the natural everyday speaking nature of it.
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